The game ended. It was 5-0. There were rambunctious fireworks and a bunch of screaming that can be heard throughout the neighborhood and streets of Chicago. The fireworks lit up the sky followed by the loud roaring of adults who were celebrating. Many families hugged each other and celebrated together in their homes. Emotions fled through many Cubs fans like a steady river stream flowing into the ocean. W flags everywhere. On cars and hung on houses. People, even running on the streets holding these flags in the air. It was a marvelous day for Cubs fans.
On this day, October 22nd, 2016, the Cubs had won a game against the Los Angeles Dodgers. They're advancing to the World Series for the first time in 71 years. Many people were celebrating the triumph of the Cubs winning against the Los Angeles Dodgers.
The next day, newspaper articles all over had front page news about the Cubs. On this day, October 22nd, 2016, Chicago has made history.
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I think you used really good vocabulary. Like you gave different words to describe it better, and you even gave examples, such as "Emotions fled through many Cubs fans like a steady river stream flowing into the ocean." That was a really good way to help describe the emotions Cubs fans felt. I also think you did a good job separating your paragraphs. Like for the first paragraph you described the effect of the win, in the second paragraph you told about the game, and in the final paragraph you told about even more after effects continuing on after the win. I think everything looks good, I don't see any errors. Everything is spelled correctly, you have the right punctuation, and how you used different vocabulary, instead of using the same words.
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